Comments on: KILL DEVIL HILLS (working title) - Scene 1 http://thedirectorsector.com/2009/05/06/kill-devil-hills-working-title-scene/ Sun, 01 Aug 2010 06:18:51 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.7.1 hourly 1 By: devilvet http://thedirectorsector.com/2009/05/06/kill-devil-hills-working-title-scene/comment-page-1/#comment-422 devilvet Thu, 07 May 2009 17:32:31 +0000 http://thedirectorsector.com/?p=254#comment-422 I'd skip the part about how people react to him (we know that) I'd focus on the story about cutting off the dick. Even though it is deprived...It is the part of this guy's story we dont know (or maybe dont want to believe). I'd suggest he tell us the story of how he had to move to this spot from another after cutting off some guy's dick. Also forget about ROLF saying the word "soul". I dont think we need it. Too on the nose. There is my unsolicted advice. Delete comment if it is uninvited! I’d skip the part about how people react to him (we know that) I’d focus on the story about cutting off the dick. Even though it is deprived…It is the part of this guy’s story we dont know (or maybe dont want to believe). I’d suggest he tell us the story of how he had to move to this spot from another after cutting off some guy’s dick.

Also forget about ROLF saying the word “soul”. I dont think we need it. Too on the nose.

There is my unsolicted advice. Delete comment if it is uninvited!

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